Friday, January 9, 2009

Without my love

I didn't write this poem when I was going through a breakup— but I believe that it portrays the feeling one gets when it does. This is a good example of one of my six lined poems— even though the rhyming scheme isn't the way my others are. I particulary like the way I tie the end of one line logically with the next. I'm really proud of this fact— so much so that I attempted this technique in future poems as well.

Without my love my body weeps
within my soul my heart sleeps

Awakened again by cold pain
my body shivers without restrain

I hold my head still to hear a sound
but I only discover there's no one around

I've found my place, I've won no race
I only wish they'd see my space

So who's to say I can't go on
my love is gone… I'm not the one

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